Jennifer Dunne
Jul 28, 2022

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I particularly like example #2. In the bad writing, the reader is busy trying to figure out what's going on. But in the good writing, you can subtly direct the reader to notice 1) the act of moving and carrying ALL of her furniture, 2) the order of bringing in the furniture and then placing it where it needed to go, and 3) the difference in size/shape/layout from her previous home to the new apartment. Depending on the context this is in, finding the right point of view for the sentence can have a lot of meaning.

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Jennifer Dunne
Jennifer Dunne

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